Moriah Leila

I have to say that while this poem is powerful and well-structured, I am left at odds over your word choices. Half of them I don't even know how to ...

I totally agree with Silented on this one. Your idea is solid, but you aren't showing us anything new. You aren't sharing any emotion with the reader. And that is ...

I like the internal battle of the vampire, although I do wish we could feel more of his turmoil. Poetry is about emotion, and this was lacking it. I want ...

I have to agree with Elinor, this is not what I would consider poetry, but prose. Just by putting it into stanzas, does not make it poetry. If you were ...

I disagree with Sleeping, in that I think you did present love in a new perspective. When I first saw the title, I was like, great another poem about love. ...

Good job! I am very impressed at the quality of your poetry at such a young age. I think you should expand on this poem. Maybe talk about other things ...

Well, it is obvious that the speaker likes fruit and they list some good reasons as to why they like it so much. But it doesn't make me want to ...

Hmm, I'm not sure if I would classify this as poetry, even though it contains quite a bit of poetry. It feels more like a short story to me. Especially ...

I agree that this is a very short poem and therefore difficult to find anything to critisize or to praise. I do like your description of the sky. I love ...

I totally agree with thedelphinater in that this poem lacked any real emotion. I totally get what you're trying to say and I can say that I relate. I wanted ...

Hey there! I really enjoyed this poem. It is so true, we can do nothing to stop time from passing. I don't think we are really victims of time, if ...

I can understand why this style of poetry could be your least favorite, as it is extremely redundant and I am almost pulled my hair out, just reading it. However, ...

I wish you had described more of the game in this poem. How does it smell, taste, sound, feel, and look like? What game are you playing? If it were ...

I agree with stuffkatiewrites that some of the phrases you used took this poem from being poetry to being a conversation. While I think you do a good job of ...

I must say that I was very impressed with this poem. (I gave you a star!) There were so many instances where I was like, "Wow!" I really enjoyed reading ...